, I'm trying to write a story based on SAO, but I'm not that good of a writer (SHOCK 
). Well I could use some critique and I know alot of you have written stuff sooo thanks. Oh yeah I don't have a title yet sorry.Story (Click Here To Hide/Show Text)
God Iâm boredâŚNothing like school to make you fall asleep in the morning⌠There were still 3 hours of school left and today was the day Sword art online came out. I had already preordered it and I was told it would arrive before I left school but knowing it was at my house waiting for me made the waiting worse.
âKuroh Shirogane, wake up!â
âY-Yes Sensei.â I said caught off guard by the sudden scream.
God I canât wait to get out of here. The teacher scrolled on and on about some history lesson we should all be paying attention to but I couldnât concentrate.
Why canât this world be interesting? A fantasy world would be better. This was the exact reason that made me want to play SAO, you actually go in the game using a device known a Nerve Gear, there was already a Beta and people had said it was amazing; it was actually like you were in another world.
âRING!â Finally I thought as I raced out of the classroom. I lived next to my school so I was home in a flash.
âHi Mom!â I yelled as I ran into the house, I picked up the package and ran up the stairs and into my room. I opened it up and plugged it into my computer. The Nerve gear was almost like a bicycle helmet, except it had a black screen that covered your eyes and there were some lights in the side. I put it on and waited for it to charge.
âLink Start!â
With that the Nerve Gear activated and I saw the logo of SAO. I made my character, "Kuro", yes I am the most original person ever, now shut up. I finished making him look like me, brown hair, green eyes, the works, and suddenly I'm standing in the middle of a square hundreds of lights popping into existence and leaving players behind.
A message pops up in front of me and says [Welcome to SAO, you are now in the Town of Beginnings, would you like to view the tutorial?] another window opens in front of me, [YES or NO]. I hit [NO] and take in the town for a moment before rushing outside of the town to fight something and explore, it was the reason I came in here anyway.
Instead of finding an opponent or a monster however, I see an enormous field before me. There was a forest off to the side, and a bunch of pieces of land were suspended in the air, connected to the ground only by a small piece of rock that made the⌠cliff? I donât even know what to call that.
This really is just like a fantasy world; I would never find something like this in real life.
I turn around, expecting to see more wonders and I see a boar, looking more closely, it had a tag saying [Blue Boar] above it; I guess it was its name. I draw my blade run towards it ready to claim my first victory in this world. I slash at it, leaving behind a red gash, knocking it down and taking out a fifth of its life.
The [Blue Boar] gets back up and suddenly its tusks start to glow. I realize I have no idea how to block; I try to dodge by jumping to the side ... and spectacularly end up on the ground.
"Why you little...â I get up and charge the boar doing a bit more damage but once again it charges and I find myself on the floor for the second time in 60 seconds. Finally losing my cool, I jump towards the boar with my sword held high when the blade starts to glow green.
"Huh?" My body moves be it self, slashing the boar in two and leaving a red gash on its neck. The boar explodes into little shards and a Message appeared.
[EXP: 10/100 Col: 350]
"........â I finally realized what the message meant.
âYeah!â I cry letting myself go, I had slain my first monster in SAO, now if only I knew how to make my sword glow again... I was pretty sure I had just used a [Sword Skill], this game used them instead of magic but I didn't know how to activate them, I was so exited I forgot to read the guide book before going out of the city. I decide to wing it, picking a fight with another boar and seeing if I can activate it again.
I fair better this time, already used to the boarsâ attacks and I manage to defeat it without activating a [Sword Skill]. I look around and seeing no monsters, I decide to sit and read the guide.
"Uhhh........get into position......wait for power to build up......and release... [Sword Skills] are in the skills menu. Got it!" I opened my menu and look at what skills I had.
[Slate], a fast forward slash, and [Strike], a strong overhead swing. From the description it looks like I just used [Strike], I must have accidently activated it when I jumped towards the boar.
I find a new [Blue Boar], and this time I charge and use [Strike] to finish it off in one hit.
[EXP: 30/100 Col: 450]
Well Iâve made some progress, I guess. Letâs see if I can find some more enemies.
I run around looking for another boar, and I see the 2, drinking water at the river, I charge one of them with [Strike] killing it, and wait for the other [Blue Boar] to charge. When it does I successfully manage to dodge it and I activate the skill [Slant] as the [Blue Boar] recovers from it charge. My blade glows starts to glow blue and I feel my body moving on its own again.
"Hya!" I scream as I fly straight into the boar sword first, I cross him and leave another red gash this time from his head to his hind legs and he stands there for a few seconds until he explodes like the other two.
I did it, I beat him, I...I feel so exhilarated. So this is what it feels to live in an interesting world.
I look for more boars to hunt, taking them out one by one, some with [Sword Skills] other with my own ability. Before I know it it's close to 7:00 in the real world and I'm lying on the ground after taking out the last boar. Suddenly a message shows up.
[EXP 100/100 Col: 1250]
[LEVEL UP]
[Please select 2 Skills to level up]
A menu appears in front of me and it shows an entire list of skills, they were classed in [Combat Skills], [Support Skills] and [Production Skills]. I already had [One-Handed Swords], the basic [Combat Skill], and from what I read in the guide book if you level up this skill you get more weapon options later which could be useful so I spend one point in that.
For my second skill I level up [Enemy Scanning]. If I can find more enemies I can level up more, plus it looks like it works to find players and items too.
I look up from my menu and see the sun is setting.
"Ahh!! I spent the whole day in the game... My parents are going to kill me..." I move my hand to open the menu when suddenly I'm back at the square of the [Town of Beginnings].More and more people start to appear, in the same white flash they did when I logged on.
Theyâre all talking and many look nervous as if we were all in trouble.
Whatâs going on?
Suddenly the game goes into a red tone and a message appears.
[System Announcement] [System Announcement]
A lot of players start to look relived.
I wonder whyâŚ
Suddenly a figure in a red robe appears in the sky and speaks
[Players, I welcome you to my world]
âKuroh Shirogane, wake up!â
âY-Yes Sensei.â I said caught off guard by the sudden scream.
God I canât wait to get out of here. The teacher scrolled on and on about some history lesson we should all be paying attention to but I couldnât concentrate.
Why canât this world be interesting? A fantasy world would be better. This was the exact reason that made me want to play SAO, you actually go in the game using a device known a Nerve Gear, there was already a Beta and people had said it was amazing; it was actually like you were in another world.
âRING!â Finally I thought as I raced out of the classroom. I lived next to my school so I was home in a flash.
âHi Mom!â I yelled as I ran into the house, I picked up the package and ran up the stairs and into my room. I opened it up and plugged it into my computer. The Nerve gear was almost like a bicycle helmet, except it had a black screen that covered your eyes and there were some lights in the side. I put it on and waited for it to charge.
âLink Start!â
With that the Nerve Gear activated and I saw the logo of SAO. I made my character, "Kuro", yes I am the most original person ever, now shut up. I finished making him look like me, brown hair, green eyes, the works, and suddenly I'm standing in the middle of a square hundreds of lights popping into existence and leaving players behind.
A message pops up in front of me and says [Welcome to SAO, you are now in the Town of Beginnings, would you like to view the tutorial?] another window opens in front of me, [YES or NO]. I hit [NO] and take in the town for a moment before rushing outside of the town to fight something and explore, it was the reason I came in here anyway.
Instead of finding an opponent or a monster however, I see an enormous field before me. There was a forest off to the side, and a bunch of pieces of land were suspended in the air, connected to the ground only by a small piece of rock that made the⌠cliff? I donât even know what to call that.
This really is just like a fantasy world; I would never find something like this in real life.
I turn around, expecting to see more wonders and I see a boar, looking more closely, it had a tag saying [Blue Boar] above it; I guess it was its name. I draw my blade run towards it ready to claim my first victory in this world. I slash at it, leaving behind a red gash, knocking it down and taking out a fifth of its life.
The [Blue Boar] gets back up and suddenly its tusks start to glow. I realize I have no idea how to block; I try to dodge by jumping to the side ... and spectacularly end up on the ground.
"Why you little...â I get up and charge the boar doing a bit more damage but once again it charges and I find myself on the floor for the second time in 60 seconds. Finally losing my cool, I jump towards the boar with my sword held high when the blade starts to glow green.
"Huh?" My body moves be it self, slashing the boar in two and leaving a red gash on its neck. The boar explodes into little shards and a Message appeared.
[EXP: 10/100 Col: 350]
"........â I finally realized what the message meant.
âYeah!â I cry letting myself go, I had slain my first monster in SAO, now if only I knew how to make my sword glow again... I was pretty sure I had just used a [Sword Skill], this game used them instead of magic but I didn't know how to activate them, I was so exited I forgot to read the guide book before going out of the city. I decide to wing it, picking a fight with another boar and seeing if I can activate it again.
I fair better this time, already used to the boarsâ attacks and I manage to defeat it without activating a [Sword Skill]. I look around and seeing no monsters, I decide to sit and read the guide.
"Uhhh........get into position......wait for power to build up......and release... [Sword Skills] are in the skills menu. Got it!" I opened my menu and look at what skills I had.
[Slate], a fast forward slash, and [Strike], a strong overhead swing. From the description it looks like I just used [Strike], I must have accidently activated it when I jumped towards the boar.
I find a new [Blue Boar], and this time I charge and use [Strike] to finish it off in one hit.
[EXP: 30/100 Col: 450]
Well Iâve made some progress, I guess. Letâs see if I can find some more enemies.
I run around looking for another boar, and I see the 2, drinking water at the river, I charge one of them with [Strike] killing it, and wait for the other [Blue Boar] to charge. When it does I successfully manage to dodge it and I activate the skill [Slant] as the [Blue Boar] recovers from it charge. My blade glows starts to glow blue and I feel my body moving on its own again.
"Hya!" I scream as I fly straight into the boar sword first, I cross him and leave another red gash this time from his head to his hind legs and he stands there for a few seconds until he explodes like the other two.
I did it, I beat him, I...I feel so exhilarated. So this is what it feels to live in an interesting world.
I look for more boars to hunt, taking them out one by one, some with [Sword Skills] other with my own ability. Before I know it it's close to 7:00 in the real world and I'm lying on the ground after taking out the last boar. Suddenly a message shows up.
[EXP 100/100 Col: 1250]
[LEVEL UP]
[Please select 2 Skills to level up]
A menu appears in front of me and it shows an entire list of skills, they were classed in [Combat Skills], [Support Skills] and [Production Skills]. I already had [One-Handed Swords], the basic [Combat Skill], and from what I read in the guide book if you level up this skill you get more weapon options later which could be useful so I spend one point in that.
For my second skill I level up [Enemy Scanning]. If I can find more enemies I can level up more, plus it looks like it works to find players and items too.
I look up from my menu and see the sun is setting.
"Ahh!! I spent the whole day in the game... My parents are going to kill me..." I move my hand to open the menu when suddenly I'm back at the square of the [Town of Beginnings].More and more people start to appear, in the same white flash they did when I logged on.
Theyâre all talking and many look nervous as if we were all in trouble.
Whatâs going on?
Suddenly the game goes into a red tone and a message appears.
[System Announcement] [System Announcement]
A lot of players start to look relived.
I wonder whyâŚ
Suddenly a figure in a red robe appears in the sky and speaks
[Players, I welcome you to my world]
