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[arimibn]

So I'm going to make a 10 chapter(11 if you count the prologue) long hack as a gift for my brother Ismail.

I don't think I told you guys, but my little brother Ismail, and my little sister Maryam moved to New York. They are living with my grandmother so that my mother can save money to buy a new house.

The plan is for them to live there for a year and a half, then they will move back to Georgia. Hopefully anyway.

Annnyway. Ismail and me are very close, and I want to make him a homecoming gift. Yes. I want this hack to be completely finished by the time he gets back.

So obviously, the first step is....

Correct! Writing the story!

So yeah. Here's what it is so far. Help me complete it! Remember! Chap10 is the Final Chapter! So technically...It'll go...Chap 9...then Final Chapter. Lol

Also, keep in mind, this is the outline. Not the script. XD


Prologue-
Introduce the player to the main character, Ismail.
He's training with his instructor in an open field.

Chapter 1- Ismail's older brother disappears.
In order to find him, Ismail leaves on a journey to
find the sword of heroes. His friend, Matthew, comes
with him. After they pass by a village, they notice that the villagers
are being attacked by strange creatures! Heartless!(Shadow)
Ismail and Matthew defeat the heartless. The villagers thank them
and ask where Ismail and Matthew are headed. Ismail tells them that
he is going to find the sword of heroes and rescue his brother.
In order to offer up help, a retired fighter named Horkos from the village
joins the group.

Chapter 2- Ismail, Matthew, and Horkos continue to travel.
Following rumours of a special sword that lies hidden in a temple,
they visit a temple. They go inside, but instead of finding the sword
of heroes, they find Ismail's Prf weapon. During the level they recruit a
theif who is a treasure hunter. The temple is infested with heartless.

Chapter 3- People start hearing rumors of an enigmatic man who controls
the heartless. They come across a city. A cleric asks them for help with
dealing with an infestation of heartless. She joins the group. At the
end of the chapter, they find out the one controlling the heartless is
someone who calls himself Orochi.

Chapter 4-

Chapter 5-

Chapter 6-

Chapter 7- They find out that Ismail's older brother is Orochi. He flees.

Chapter 8- Chasing Orochi.

Chapter 9- Confrontation with Orochi.
At the end of the chapter he comes to his senses.

Final Chapter- Vs a Giant Heartless. Lol.

[Snow]

Looks good so far. but whats Orochis motivation?

By the way I used to live in atlanta,

[Golden Warrior]

You may be the first person putting heartless into FE!

This looks good from what I've read of it. Is the Prf. weapon going to be OP? And is Orochi supposed to be you?

[arimibn]

Lol. My brother's all time favorite game is Kingdom hearts, I have a few heartless sheets...So yeah. XD

And...Yeah. XD But you weren't supposed to know that.

[Golden Warrior]

XD, Whaaaat? Well, that explains everything. I be satisfied. XD

[arimibn]

You know you COULD give me chapter ideas...

[Golden Warrior]

I can't think of any right now, I might be able to give some tomorrow.

Do something with mountains and bandits, just to be cliche.

[arimibn]

Lol. It should be Kingdom hearts oriented.
Heartless Bandits on a mountain!

Well...Not necessarily. But I need a way for Chapter 3 to connect to Chapter 10.

Bobryk...Where the HELL are you?!

[Bobryk]

QUOTE

Bobryk...Where the HELL are you?!

HERE DON'T WORRY I GOT THIS.


Well let's see here. Looks like you need something to fill in those middle chapters, so I'll see what I can whip up...

So at the end of Ch. 3 they find out the dude controlling heartless is Orochi. K. Let's go from there....

Ch 4. They decide to ignore the Orochi rumors for now and keep going for the sword of heroes. Ismail figures if they have that sword, they can beat the dude up. Chapter 4 takes them into a mountain pass that leads into a deep underground cavern, where they meet a shitton of heartless and have to go crazy. They question how the heartless got there and instantly suspect Orochi is following them or is way ahead of them.

Ch 5. Now they're deep underground and there's fire and magma and shiz (kinda like that one map from FE6/7 and 10). They kill off some heartless and get to the end of the map, where there's an altar with a sweet-ass sword on it.

A robed guy then teleports in and takes the sword, telling Ismail he's not ready for it yet. He then leaves without ever showing his face.

Ch 6. They leave the cave and are instantly confronted by heartless. They're really tough and there's a ton of them, which Ismail must defeat to "test" or "prove" himself.

Ch 7. Robed guy appears at the very end of Ch 6, and at the start of Ch 7 the team is forced to fight him and a bunch of heartless. He says that if they can face him in battle, Ismail will get the sword.

Ismail and him have special dialogue and when he's defeated, he gives Ismail the sword of heroes and flies off again. Ismail then figures out Orochi is his brother and gives chase.

Ch 8. Your chase scene. Hopefully to somewhere epic like a huge tower or the end of the world with fires and shit.

Ch 9. They find and battle Orochi again. Possibly hack in that Ismail must defeat him with the sword of heroes to actually continue the game or else it's game over? That'd be a nice touch. The sword of heroes makes him come to his senses but reveal what he was trying to do. He wanted to summon the master of the heartless in order to destroy it, but the dark power corrupted him and he would've lost sight of everything had Ismail not defeated him with the sword of heroes.

Ch 10. He summons the heartless lord and they fight it as the final boss, with Orochi recruited.


K, there's your story. Did it in 15 minutes. Do what you will with it! It's obviously not going to be perfect XD

Btw I have no idea what heartless are or anything about Kingdom Hearts so, yeah.

[Golden Warrior]

^ I like what he wrote. Stick with that!

[arimibn]

You are so full of WIN. NICE. I like the idea!

[Golden Warrior]

QUOTE (arimibn @ Aug 23 2012, 07:15 PM)

You are so full of WIN. NICE. I like the idea!

Now you must add a copyright to the idea for the hack. Well, did better than I would've. XD

[Bobryk]

Lmao, nah. Go ahead and steal it. I reserve the right to use that idea in the future though if I want

[arimibn]

Be my guest. So long as a get 2% of the profits! XD

[Bobryk]

sounds like what I'm used to >.>

But good luck with the hack! If you need more assistance just ask.

[arimibn]

You only get 2% for your own books?! WTF?!

Meh, I have Gold for eventing help. XD And spriting I can take care of myself. XD

[Bobryk]

Haha no I'm exaggerating but it's a low number still

And as for hacking I'm borderline useless, so story-related/writing related things I can help with XD

[Lancer]

OwO cool yo.

Will these 10 chapters be the full length or will they be like, part 1 of a story you might expand on later?

[arimibn]

The whole story is going to be 11 chapters. (Prologue.) I...have other hacks, ya know. XD I do still wanna finish those.

[arimibn]

Prologue Script
Narration
Hey there! My name's Ismail! I'm a mercenary from the continent of Tellius! Or to be precise, Daein. I'm training so that one day, I can be a knight and serve directly under Lady Micaiah! Along with my older brother. But since I'm a mercenary, I just get to fight bandits.

This is my teacher. He's the prince of Hatari! And because of his wolf blood, he's really good with his sword. He's been training me for a year now. He says I'm a bit of a slow learner, but that I do have potential! I hope that one day, I can be as strong as him and my older brother. So I'll keep on training!
Narration End

Okay Ismail. It's time for your weekly evaluation.
Yes sir! Who am I going to spar with today?
You are going to spar with Matthew.
Heh~ I won't lose!
Take it easy Ismail! Remember! We're still sparring!
Heh! I don't need to be lectured by you!
You say that...Yet I still have the scar from our last "sparring" session.
Okay, okay...I'll be careful!
Begin!


Mission Objective
(Basically, you play as Ismail. You have to defeat Matthew. Once you defeat Matthew, this happens. The level isn't over yet though.)

You win! You win!
Sorry! Guess I got a little carried away...
And in other news...the sky is blue...
Well done Ismail. You need to learn to control your power, but otherwise, a job well done.
Thanks Teacher!
Now for your next opponent, you'll face me.
W-Wha?! I'm no match for you!
Don't worry. I'll go easy on you. All you have to do is hit me once within 10 bouts.
Oh. Well that shouldn't be too hard...
Begin.
Player Phase
(Masrur is unarmed and has 1 HP. Hit him once and the level is complete. You have 10 turns to hit him.)

Well done Ismail.
...Phew...You..You're fast. But I...I did it...
That you did. A job well done Ismail.
Nice job Ismail!
Yeah...Phew....

End of chapter