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@  Fire Blazer : (24 December 2019 - 03:17 AM) naw, it's when the bots make collaborated efforts to crawl places, lol
@  kirant : (23 December 2019 - 05:20 AM) What do we do on Index Day? Give each other bots?
@  Fire Blazer : (16 December 2019 - 01:39 AM) LOL
@  xcrash1998 : (30 November 2019 - 11:07 PM) New fictional holiday "Index Day"
@  Fire Blazer : (28 November 2019 - 08:52 PM) yeah just guest bots and stuff I think :( we really were active once upon a time though...
@  kirant : (26 November 2019 - 03:48 PM) No invasion. I imagine a lot of guest bots visiting for indexing purposes.
@  xcrash1998 : (26 November 2019 - 02:15 PM) How is most people online at 959 for the 8th of October of this year? Is that right? Did I miss something or was there somekind of spambot invasion?
@  xcrash1998 : (26 November 2019 - 02:06 PM) I know what you mean, it gets awkard to post something unrelated to the current conversation, and even if somebody picks up on it, it would just become a huge mess in the c hatbox if a multitude of groups talk about different topics.
@  Fire Blazer : (10 November 2019 - 11:45 PM) especially better imo if you want to update on a topic but like only occasionally (e.g. a project you're working on or a let's play of a game)
@  Fire Blazer : (10 November 2019 - 11:44 PM) it's hard for me to explain precisely why but forums just like work better for meaningful discussion over a longer period of time ig
@  Fire Blazer : (10 November 2019 - 11:44 PM) but that's def just not hte same ig, idk
@  Fire Blazer : (10 November 2019 - 11:44 PM) yeah, you can also kind of respond at your own pace on forums. Discord conversations are often like... it's awkward to respond to something that happened a while ago, especially if the server is active, but even just in general. since you sort of need to keep track of multiple conversations at once at times, and it's not like it has a good reply/quote system ala forums, closest thing really is to copy/paste or screenshot the text you're responding to and then type a response below
@  Elwood : (09 November 2019 - 11:29 AM) Adding on to what's been said, I just enjoy the order and structure of the forums. You can look through the threads and know exactly what people are talking about. Conversation get lost and buried on discord which is why I'm not a big fan of it.
@  kirant : (06 November 2019 - 05:31 AM) I enjoy that part of forums too. They become niche communities where you can have very specialized conversations as opposed to the cluttered mess in Discord.
@  Ezra : (31 October 2019 - 01:17 AM) Yeah, part of me wishes I could go back to the times forums were more prevalent. I really enjoyed how even several different forums based off the same franchise could feel so different. It's not like what we now is bad though, I just feel nostalgic for old times.
@  Fire Blazer : (30 October 2019 - 06:39 AM) also forums in general are just not as prevalent, there are so many other ways to interact these days, like Twitter, FB, Tumblr, etc., where you can just throw your thoughts into the void. I think that's the real issue and that the only people rly interested in forums these days are either super dedicated to whatever they're about, have a specific reason/need to (e.g. support forums), or grew up with them and are thus attached to the idea enough to continue to try and use them (this was kinda me for a while lol but things happen, I couldn't keep it up forever)
@  Fire Blazer : (30 October 2019 - 06:36 AM) I've posted on SF for various reasons ofc but in terms of like making friends and stuff it's p. much just been smaller groups/forums, yeah. mainly FES
@  Elwood : (27 October 2019 - 10:08 PM) Only reason I'm even on Serenes was because I had hacking questions. @Ezra yeah I figured it must be an age thing. I've been called an old man by many a child because I use Facebook.
@  kirant : (26 October 2019 - 09:39 PM) It's strange. I don't think I've ever posted on Serenes...period. I've always been a fan of smaller forums.
@  Ezra : (26 October 2019 - 05:49 AM) I think it's because a lot of newer FE players didn't frequent forums growing up. And those that do probably end up on Serenes.

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#41 Nayr

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Posted 23 June 2012 - 06:53 PM

Few comments on your synopsis.

"The war in the North is over"

Considering that "The North" was used as the name for the enemy, it might sound better as "The war with the North is over"

Also "The rest of the world is not so lucky" is accurate, but a summary for a book back and advertising should sound more mystical. Something that shows off your literary skills and grabs the reader's attention.

"Freak storm," sounds odd for some reason. Bad storms at sea are also common, and in lesser developed times, the chance of becoming shipwrecked were more than they are now. If there's a force behind the storm, you're implying too much with this. Also you're pretty much saying right there that the inhabitants at the mysterious continent are the same people as the Forest Dwellers who wrote the stuff in that cave.

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Posted 25 June 2012 - 03:10 AM

QUOTE (Nayr @ Jun 23 2012, 01:53 PM)
Few comments on your synopsis.

"The war in the North is over". Considering that "The North" was used as the name for the enemy, it might sound better as "The war with the North is over"


That's actually the name of the conflict itself, so I kept it like that. If it wasn't then you'd be right.

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Also "The rest of the world is not so lucky" is accurate, but a summary for a book back and advertising should sound more mystical. Something that shows off your literary skills and grabs the reader's attention.


Haha yeah I totally agree. The deadline for writing this kinda crept on me tongue.gif I had two hours to write it

I'll be getting it back with their edits and critiques anyways so I figured I'd just send it, lol.

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"Freak storm," sounds odd for some reason. Bad storms at sea are also common, and in lesser developed times, the chance of becoming shipwrecked were more than they are now. If there's a force behind the storm, you're implying too much with this. Also you're pretty much saying right there that the inhabitants at the mysterious continent are the same people as the Forest Dwellers who wrote the stuff in that cave.


Indeed-- I like being blunt.

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Posted 25 June 2012 - 04:04 AM

QUOTE (Bobryk @ Jun 24 2012, 10:10 PM)
QUOTE (Nayr @ Jun 23 2012, 01:53 PM)
Few comments on your synopsis.

"The war in the North is over". Considering that "The North" was used as the name for the enemy, it might sound better as "The war with the North is over"


That's actually the name of the conflict itself, so I kept it like that. If it wasn't then you'd be right.

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Also "The rest of the world is not so lucky" is accurate, but a summary for a book back and advertising should sound more mystical. Something that shows off your literary skills and grabs the reader's attention.


Haha yeah I totally agree. The deadline for writing this kinda crept on me tongue.gif I had two hours to write it

I'll be getting it back with their edits and critiques anyways so I figured I'd just send it, lol.

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"Freak storm," sounds odd for some reason. Bad storms at sea are also common, and in lesser developed times, the chance of becoming shipwrecked were more than they are now. If there's a force behind the storm, you're implying too much with this. Also you're pretty much saying right there that the inhabitants at the mysterious continent are the same people as the Forest Dwellers who wrote the stuff in that cave.


Indeed-- I like being blunt.


1. Understood.

2. Understood.

3. You give away too much in the synopsis. By that, I'm arguably spoiled to several big elements. Be more coy.


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Posted 10 July 2012 - 11:17 PM

HOLY CRAP, I ACTUALLY UPDATED THE BLOG TODAY.

Sorry for the long time without an update (the "whenever I feel like it clause" is in effect tongue.gif).

I don't want to post another excerpt just yet, but there's a little "General Scoop" of Book Two post on the Home Page now. General scoop meaning: what you can expect, how's it different/alike to The Royal Seal, etc.

Enjoy! The next update will probably be an excerpt.

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Posted 11 July 2012 - 12:18 AM

Some of the most terrifying themes and imagery every concocted? Are you cocky, or just a salesman? tongue.gif

But I like me my dark stories. wub.gif
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#46 Nayr

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Posted 11 July 2012 - 12:27 AM

From your descriptions of the book and what's on the continent, I'm guessing Africa or South America inspired this mysterious continent they get stranded on.

I also foresee a lot of mind****ing on the characters. They've been raised to believe in a single deity and to denounce other beliefs, yet now they are going to be forced to attempt and barter with the gods of these natives in exchange for their passage out of the place. If it turns out there is something to them, I can see some of the more pious members of the party being offended, upset, and questioning their beliefs.

I also foresee Lloyd's facial expression not changing once throughout the story, except maybe to go from annoyed to angry. tongue.gif

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Posted 11 July 2012 - 01:12 AM

QUOTE (Rujio @ Jul 10 2012, 07:18 PM)
Some of the most terrifying themes and imagery every concocted? Are you cocky, or just a salesman? tongue.gif


Well, I'm in school for marketing...tongue.gif. And oh I am definitely cocky. I actually edited and cut a great deal from one scene because it was a bit too much even for me, and I wrote the damn thing. But yet, you'll be seeing the development of some pretty screwed up stuff.

Also, thanks for inadvertently pointing out that typo XD

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From your descriptions of the book and what's on the continent, I'm guessing Africa or South America inspired this mysterious continent they get stranded on.


Actually, no, though good guess. I can say this now since I've already spoken of the zany weather, so I'll say the inspiration: living in New England! The weather here is so ****ing weird. tongue.gif

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I also foresee a lot of mind****ing on the characters. They've been raised to believe in a single deity and to denounce other beliefs, yet now they are going to be forced to attempt and barter with the gods of these natives in exchange for their passage out of the place. If it turns out there is something to them, I can see some of the more pious members of the party being offended, upset, and questioning their beliefs.


ALL THE MIND****! But yes, they're in for quite the surprise, aren't they?

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I also foresee Lloyd's facial expression not changing once throughout the story, except maybe to go from annoyed to angry.


Hah! Gotta love Lloyd tongue.gif

Also: added one teeny tiny bullet I forgot to include the first time.
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Posted 11 July 2012 - 01:59 AM

QUOTE (Bobryk @ Jul 10 2012, 08:12 PM)


Actually, no, though good guess. I can say this now since I've already spoken of the zany weather, so I'll say the inspiration: living in New England! The weather here is so ****ing weird. tongue.gif

ALL THE MIND****! But yes, they're in for quite the surprise, aren't they?

Hah! Gotta love Lloyd tongue.gif

Also: added one teeny tiny bullet I forgot to include the first time.


So New England has jungles, tribals, and Witch-Doctors? tongue.gif

That's certainly a side of America that I've never seen. lol

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Posted 11 July 2012 - 02:59 AM

Ah, yes, the fabled witchdoctors of New England. They're called Red Sox fans

But yeah...maybe that part wasn't inspired by New England tongue.gif
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Posted 11 July 2012 - 03:53 PM

QUOTE (Bobryk @ Jul 10 2012, 08:12 PM)
Actually, no, though good guess. I can say this now since I've already spoken of the zany weather, so I'll say the inspiration: living in New England! The weather here is so ****ing weird. tongue.gif


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Posted 16 July 2012 - 03:54 AM

Not necessarily a blog update, but...

I just massively overhauled the Facebook page, pretty much starting it again from scratch. If you've got a Facebook account and want to give it a "like" I'd appreciate it!

Link: https://www.facebook.com/The.Dream.War

Note: You don't have to be friends with me on Facebook (feel free to add me if you want, just tell me who you are), but you do need an account.

Thanks y'all!





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Posted 24 July 2012 - 08:11 PM

Double post...woops. But I updated the blog today with a new page! "Oniro Lore and History."

Check it out and the rest of the blog here: http://thedreamwar.b...nd-history.html
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Posted 25 July 2012 - 03:08 AM

Fall 2012 for Book Two? Oh boy, can't wait. I think I already praised you and finished my thoughts on Book 1 before lurking into nothingness, but I'll gladly repeat my thoughts on the second half if I didn't already. Also here's to hoping Adrian becomes popular enough to not fade into side-character status.
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Posted 25 July 2012 - 03:31 AM

QUOTE (Felover3 @ Jul 24 2012, 10:08 PM)
Fall 2012 for Book Two? Oh boy, can't wait. I think I already praised you and finished my thoughts on Book 1 before lurking into nothingness, but I'll gladly repeat my thoughts on the second half if I didn't already. Also here's to hoping Adrian becomes popular enough to not fade into side-character status.


Thanks! And yes, Fall 2012! It successfully took me less time to write a novel than it did to localize FE13!

and I don't remember you giving your final thoughts on the book but since you said "praises" I assume it was a good review XD and among readers Adrian seems quite popular

Edit: Nvm, fixed them! I think...
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Posted 28 July 2012 - 02:43 AM

Not an update, and another double post, but this is totally worth it.


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Posted 28 July 2012 - 12:03 PM

Dat Bulbasaur. XD

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Posted 06 August 2012 - 03:53 AM

Ohai guys. Forgot to update here (been a bit busy) but...

I FINISHED THE MANUSCRIPT! WOOO. The blog has been updated accordingly biggrin.gif

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Posted 23 August 2012 - 07:48 PM

Long time no update!

THREE updates today, including a Book Two chapter teaser and a short excerpt. It's been a while since I've posted a teaser, so check it out!

http://thedreamwar.b...-three-and.html
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Posted 12 October 2012 - 12:09 AM

Ok, so it's been a while since an update (I've been stupidly busy) BUT there's finally another!

It's the one year anniversary of The Dream War: The Royal Seal! To "celebrate" I'm offering a special promotion, available now through the 18th. If you haven't picked up a copy yet, now's your best chance to! Check out the details here:

http://thedreamwar.b...-turns-one.html


Other big updates are on the way as well, so stay tuned!
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Posted 12 October 2012 - 12:35 AM

So, what if I'm interested in having one of your copies but not in spending $20 to get another copy of a book I already own?
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