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[Oblivion Knight]

I didn't see a general topic for writing or poetry so I felt this needed to be made. d:

My newest poem, of which I'm the most proud of.

Twilight Dawn

You’ll find your love isn’t dead
So cheer, and feel no dread
The one that you hold dear
Will soon be near


Across time and space
That treasured life
Tis among the human race
No need for the knife


The one you seek to find
Is just one last climb
Just reach out
And you’ll win your bout

[Fire Blazer]

I'll comment on yours later, for now, I'd like to post this and perhaps get critique.

Where I'm From

I am from Europe,
from Asia one might say.
From poor crowded streets,
from hot and sunny days.
I am from a land of dreams,
of the just and the free.

I am from its basketball courts, rigid roads and swishing nets. I am from the competition, the people who can say it all, and the people who can do it all. I’m from the shots, the blocks, and everything in between. I am from wins, and I am from losses, neither stop me from moving on.

I am from the digital images, animated into life, onto TV, controlled by my fingers, like a puppet. I am from the sounds that sooth my inner soul, whether they be drums or words of poetry.

I’m from my brothers, from not just one but two. Our origins are alike, but ourselves very different. I’m from the memories clouded by the shadow of time. But to me where I’m from is more than just a tale of past. I am of where I am from, for that is what makes me be me.


The idea is to mimic a poem "Where I'm From" by George Ella Lyons, each stanza should have some sorta theme in a way, and yeah, it's for HW... I'd mainly like to know of any grammatical errors or things that should be worded differently. :\ ty

EDIT: Stupid MS Word and its format >_> it's supposed to be broken up into lines but whatever