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Posted 08 December 2011 - 01:21 AM
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Bobryk -- holy crap I look away for two seconds and I have knots all up in my shit |
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Bobryk -- holy crap I look away for two seconds and I have knots all up in my shit |
Posted 26 December 2011 - 07:50 PM
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Well, I finished the book. In three sittings, ignoring eggnog breaks. First order of business: Typos. There weren't many I noticed. I think there were a couple places where the word "that" either should have been there but wasn't or shouldn't have been there but was. I noticed one "have" that should have been "has." The biggest one came at the start of chapter 17, though- you said something along the lines of "by the week's end, the houses were almost uninhabitable." Given that they were rebuilding those houses, shouldn't the word be habitable? A little later in that chapter, you also said "sneakily manner" instead of "sneaky manner." (Derp, I had a typo in there that was supposed to be a correction to your typo ![]() But I've noticed more typos than this in classical literature we read at school, and given that this is a first edition, that's not bad. Onto the actual book. Given how quickly I read it, I think it's obvious I enjoyed it. There were a few things that bugged me at the beginning, but either they stopped happening later or I just got used to it. You have/had a tendency to go into present tense when describing characters sometimes. I found this sort of weird because it was like you were actually talking to me, not like I was just reading a story. Not bad at all, just weird. What bothered me a little, though, was the transition between past and present tense. At least one time, it happened mid sentence, and not in a way that made sense to me. The other things that bugged me were things you couldn't really control- it was mostly the way people used words. I think it's probably just an Eastern US vs. Western US thing, where the way you guys use certain words is simply different from here. The big one, though, was the way you used "withdraw." Goodness, you used that word a lot, and (almost?) never in the way I would use it. By the end, I was completely used to it, but the first time I was like "wait, 'withdrew his sword?' What?" I'm going to put the rest of this in a spoiler Talkin' 'bout specific story stuff now (Click Here To Hide/Show Text) And to finish off, I'd like to say I loved that last paragraph. Sounds weird, but it seemed very poetic to me. |
Posted 26 December 2011 - 10:40 PM
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Bobryk -- holy crap I look away for two seconds and I have knots all up in my shit |
Posted 27 December 2011 - 02:09 AM
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Bobryk -- holy crap I look away for two seconds and I have knots all up in my shit |
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